Adventures in Museland

2009-10-18T02:00:00.000-07:00

Quick update, I am writing this on my new ipod touch, getting used to the keyboard. No update on Friday since I wasn't very well. Not a lot of work done on TLOTT over the past few days because of that, though have been thinking about it a lot especially what I can do with the Ana character, the main female character. Since by the Big Middle, which I'll havt to blog about soon, she has met up with Jonathan, the second part of the story is really set for her. So what I'm struggling with is working out the first part of the story where she has to get from her father's home to her uncle in the big city. Hmmm, plottinh, plotting.

Otherwise, I have used the Jim Butcher method to work out some problems with my Soulreaper story for Chapters 7 & 8. Some of what he talks about with Scenes and Sequels has really helped me realise that you can have some plot points happen even when it is a sequel.

Any way, when I have more time I'll blog some more about Climax and Big Middles!

Story Question

2009-10-15T14:40:00.000-07:00

So today I thought I'd talk about the first step of building a plot according to Mr Butcher, the Story Question.

Let me quote liberally here from Mr Butcher himself:

The story skeleton (also called a story question) consists of a simple format:

*WHEN SOMETHING HAPPENS*, *YOUR PROTAGONIST* *PURSUES A GOAL*. But will he succeed when *ANTAGONIST PROVIDES OPPOSITION*?

I find this really helpful in getting the basic jist of the story down - it works as well for the snowflake method in creating a basic sentence describing the story, though with the Butcher method you end up with a longer sentence (I aim for less than 50 words).

It is especially useful in getting a handle on your protagonist's goal, but also the various obstacles you're going to throw in his way.

So for my story, The Legacy of the Thorn, what is the story question?

When his colleague tries to kill a visiting dignitary, secret service operative Jonathan Marlowe sets out to find out why. But will he succeed when he finds himself pitted against his own former colleagues, a global conspiracy to hide an ancient secret, and the ultimate evil herself...

Obviously, this will make a hell of a lot more sense to me than anyone else, but it sets out the basic situation at the beginning, as well as the different things he is going to have to face.

Lots of work done on the plot today, have started filling in Jonathan's plot in more detail and have started sketching in Ana's as well - I'm going to follow Mr Butcher's advice and create a character page for each of my characters, as well as a plot summary for the key ones (Jonathan and Ana, but also the bad guy and a few of the more important secondary characters).

Tomorrow I'll talk about creating the first and last scenes, and what Mr Butcher calls the Big Middle!

Currently Reading:
The Angel's Game by Carlos Ruis Zafon (still!!!)
The Lost Symbol by Dan Brown (still!!)

Listening to:
Tenth Wonder Podcasts for the most part - you guys rock!

Watched:
Heroes s04e04 and 05
Leverage s02e01 (so cool)
Fringe s02e03 (great as well, though I'm still waiting for Leonard Nimoy)

Looking forward to:
Have decided to watch Dollhouse season 1 all the way through and see what all the fuss is about
Supernatural's next episode

Building Character

2009-10-13T14:20:00.000-07:00

So amongst other things today, I was working on the characters of the book (now tentatively called The Legacy of the Thorn), most especially the protagonist and antagonist. Both now have names, storylines and motivations, some of which have been quite surprising.

I had originally intended for the antagonist to be someone with a family link to the female hero - I have now decided to make him into an aelfin with very clear motivations for doing what he is doing. Thanks to the character work, I've also been able to come up with the basic beginning and ending of the story.

I have tried quite a few plotting and character building tools over the years, including the Snowflake Method which I still use at times. One I have come across in the past few months is not so much a method as a few pointers from an urban fantasy author named Jim Butcher, writer of the Dresden Files.

Over on his blog, he delves into quite a lot of pointers about building characters (assigning them tags and traits), building your story through the Story Question (such and such needs to do something, but will he succeed when faced with these problems or antagonists), and using Scenes and Sequels to keep the tension up or allow your reader to breath. A lot of what he says makes a hell of a lot of sense, and is a good place to start for any newbie writer.

Hopefully, I'll be able to get some more of the story and some character work done tomorrow.

Choosing A Plot

2009-10-12T11:18:00.000-07:00

Wow, well according to Servustats, I am actually getting some people visiting this blog, which is cool. Makes me feel less as though I'm talking to myself, though I'm sure I probably am anyway... :)

Anyway, today's nano advancement has led to the following - I have decided that for the story to make sense in the world (and going with the hopeful foolish optimism that this book will get published and I might actually end up being able to make it into a series) I need to start off with a thriller story that ties in more with the overall back story, ie. a fantasy world brought forward to a 1920s era. So looks like Jonathan Marlowe will be investigating a manuscript that purports to hold the truth to what actually happened when the heroes defeated the Dark Lord (who may become a Dark Lady...)

In other news, I've been struggling with the rewrites of Chapters 7 and 8 of my Soulreaper novel, neither of which seem to want to come together. I've been hitting my head against them for the past few weeks now!

Currently Reading:
The Angel's Game by Carlos Ruis Zafon (still!)
The Lost Symbol by Dan Brown (ebook)

Listening to:
Not much since my ipod has packed up!

Watched:
Heroes s04e03
Supernatural s05e04 and 05
AMongst others

Looking forward to:
Buying an ipod touch this weekend (if I lose another kilo in Lidwine and I's diet) and seeing whether I can use the touchtype keyboard on it to write on my way to work

Update

2009-10-11T04:57:00.000-07:00

Been a while since I posted here. In between times, I've managed to decide that I will either be writing the Heart of the Storm for nano, or I'll do a complete rewrite (without looking at any of the previous material) of Soulreaper. That way I'll be able to end up with a full first draft to work off.

At the moment, I'm leaning more towards THOTS (The Heart of the Storm) since I had a number of brainwaves as to how to create this fantasy modern world. At the moment, I'm especially working on the races and this is what I've come up with:

* The Aelfin - Elf-type creatures, they are the only ones to have 'magic'. They are a very spiritual race, who once had a theocracy. However, during the last war, their land was totally poisoned and they are now nomadic, kind of like the Jews after the Diaspora.

* The Dwelven - Dwarf-type creatures, they are as short as normal dwarves, but relatively low-tech compared to some of the others. Though they do have their own lands, many are captured and enslaved, used as slave labour by the other races.

* The Huld or Huldrae - Trolls/Ogres. They are shapeshifters and changelins, whose initial form is the hulking giants of legend. They are the most powerful race in the Old World, highly intelligent, with lots of tech.

* The Genossans - Goblins/Gnomes. A small race, kin to the dwelven, but thinner and more twisted. They are the most intelligent, and have developed most of the tech that the others use.

* The Urchs - Orcs. Ugly bastards, they are a very honorable warrior race. Kind of like the Turkish Empire in the early 20th century. Very cultured, but decadent.

The Virii - Basically plant-people. These are the least developed, but I think the most interesting. There are so many different types of plants, I think these could be pretty cool.

So there we go, the six races, to which we must add the humans. All seven races are living in a 1920s type world, so tech level will be steam-based river boats and trains, the first combustible engines making their appearance, blimps, high skyscrapers appearing, etc. And behind all of this in the deep past is a classic fantasy situation, with a Dark Lord, etc... who was defeated about 2000 years before.

So that is the basic world in which the Heart of the Storm will be set.

Now for the plot!!! :)

Nano Ideas #1

2009-09-28T10:21:00.000-07:00

I've decided to use this blog to put down my ideas for nanowrimo 2009 in the hope that I'll be able to decide which of them to use. To start off with tonight, I'm going to look at The Heart of the Storm.

Nano Idea #1 - The Heart of the Storm

Tag - Terry Brooks meets Robert Ludlum with a hint of Clive Cussler

Genre - A science fantasy thriller

Back cover copy -

The ancient order of the Hearthunters. An organisation of untold wealth and power, the shadowy hands behind the Dark Crusade that saw mankind forced from the Old World. An organisation devoted to protecting the secret location of one of mankind’s most treasured artefacts. An organisation lost in the fires of the Exodus… Until now.

Léa Barmoor, daughter of renowned historian Benjamin Barmoor, is travelling with her father through the wilderness of the Shattered Shore, when a group of assassins try to kill them by derailing the train they are travelling on. Léa narrowly survives the attempt, but her father is killed… Before he dies, though, he entrusts her with the location of a family diary that may hold the key to secrets she has tried to elucidate her entire life…

Jonathan Marlowe, an operative of the Royal Secret Service with a magical ability he hides from all, is part of the security detail protecting a visiting aelfindred prince come to the New World as part of the Concord Initiative – an attempt to rebuild the alliance of races that once existed. When the leader of the detail tries to murder the prince, Marlowe intervenes, saving the prince’s life. Assigned to look into his superior officer’s betrayal, Marlowe discovers a plot rising to the highest levels, a conspiracy intent on stopping the Concord Initiative before it can begin. Before he can reveal the plot, however, Marlowe is declared rogue. On the run, unsure who he can trust, Marlowe must turn to Barmoor and the diary in her possession to make sense of the conspiracy… and find his way to the legendary Heart of the Storm.

Pros -

A familiar idea dealt with in an original way
The possibility of a fun story with lots of action and set pieces
Combines two of my favourite genres - thrillers and epic fantasy

Cons -

Still struggling with the exact plot, although I have a few ideas of how it starts and how it ends
Also struggling with the 'alien' races in this world, and the worldbuilding in general
Will require a change in my way of writing to fit the thriller style
Risk of it becoming a cliche thriller

Comments

This is a modified version of a very old novel, the second novel I ever finished. I doubt anyone who ever read that original novel back then would recognise it, though: apart from a few names, there is little to link the two.

The basic world idea is this - in our far future, the human race is forced to flee the Earth through a stargate type machine known as the Heart of the Storm. They arrive in a world with a bunch of alien races, all very much like certain fantasy archetypes - you have your elves (the aelfindred), the dwarves (dwelven), the dragons (mribish) and other weird races (see above - I'm still struggling with these). A dark lord is ruling over them, the humans get together a coalition and defeat him. Unfortunately, a few centuries later, the humans turn on the others and launch a war to seize control - the aliens make a coalition and throw the humans from the Old World, forcing them to flee to another continent.

In recent times, there has been another war. That has come to an end and now the humans are reaching out again: they want to reform the Concord. Unfortunately, there are a lot of people who do not like the sound of that. I still don't know exactly who these people are beyond the fact that they will have some kind of a link to the Hearthunters, a Templar-like organisation mentioned in the back cover copy above. What that link is still quite unclear... A lot of things are, unfortunately. Still, I think this could be quite a cool story, and I'm hoping it could lead to a series following Marlowe.

Excitement Rating: 7/10 at the moment

Back...

2009-09-27T14:01:00.000-07:00

After reading Gary Gibson's fantastic blog over on White Screen of Despair, I've decided to start this little blog up again. Even though I'm sure no one will be reading it, I reckon it will be a good place to talk about my current writing projects, my progress and whether I manage to actually get published. At best, it will give someone else a boost some years down the line to read these posts and see my own trials and tribulations. At worst, it will be funny to come back and read these some time later on.

So... current projects - as it has been for the last few years: Soulreaper. The story of a former assassin turned thieftaker investigating a couple of murders with an old man's soul in his head. Damn, how many times have I written that??!

At the moment I'm on a second, or third (?), draft, and have the first 6 chapters written in some form or another. I'm trying to do a constant write-reread 5 or six times-move on kind of way of writing, which I've never really done before. Not sure of the word count now and can't be bothered to check, I'll try and do it tomorrow.

Otherwise, I'm working on a series of ST fan fics I quite like, which I may or may not talk about on here.

What else? Nanowrimo is getting closer and I'm wondering whether to carry on with Soulreaper during that time and get a first draft done (slightly against nano rules but...) or whether to try something completely different. Maybe space opera I'd try and publish through Ray Gun Revival, a great pulp type ezine with a lot of guys from ex-Deep Magic. Or a more serious SF book about 4 friends caught up in an alien invasion and picking their friendship back up 250 years later (wow that doesn't sound so serious when you put it like that). Or one of three or four fantasy ideas... Choices, choices.

Currently Reading:
The Angel's Game by Carlos Ruis Zafon
The Atrocity Archives by Charles Stross (ebook)

Listening to:
Muse - The Resistance

Watched:
The Sentinel
Supernatural s05e03 (So good!)
True Blood s02e06 or 07

Looking forward to:
Catching up on Heroes/Desperate Housewives/Fringe
over next few days

2008-06-08T10:24:00.000-07:00

Hello all.

This is the second version of my work in progress: Treason, Treachery and Deceit Book One of the Ghost of Armacand Sequence.

The book is a fantasy-espionage novel set in a world like our own Renaissance, in a kingdom battling against the encroachment of the fae. I'm looking for any and all criticism though obviously I'd love praise as well... :) Here is the first chapter...

DISCLAIMER: Warning of some bad language at various places during the chapter. __________________________________________________________________________________________

The Reckoning

The Iron Road
Near Armacand
9th Bell of the Afternoon
30th of Summersbyre, 1341

I

Struggling away beyond the distant hills, the sun cast a last feeble glow on the forest, its light drained of all power by the autumn sky. The party of fifteen rode out from beneath the trees, two horses dragging an ancient wagon that carried two men while the rest walked along beside. Most of them shook with anxiety, casting wary looks back at the shadowy forest. The gloom seemed to stretch out after them, as if to drag them back into its enchanted bosom. It was the end of summer, the seventienth since magic returned to the world.

The men had been travelling the Iron Road for months, travelling from one city to the next, stopping off at the regular wayposts that had been set up in the Wyrding Wood to protect travellers. From Armacand north to Waechester, then further north all the way to Naevcastel. Two months of stifling heat beneath the stuffy forest, with hardly a sign of human life in between cities. Few were foolish enough to travel the Iron Road unless they had no choice.

But now they were home. The smell of the sea had reached them from miles away and as they had crested the Crelterns ten miles away, they had looked down across the fir ocean below, all the way to the dancing lights of the city. Armacand, Capital of the Kingdom of Isles and one of the Seven Cities that survived the Great Change. Home.

A cold snap in the air brought tears to Emund’s eyes as he looked out across the Slate Sea. Waves slapped against the beach, carried along by the rising wind. The stench of Armacand straddled the wind, the stink of too many men and women in too small a place. Even across the waves it carried, the smell of manure and rotting meat, blood and piss and sweat. Emund took a deep breath, savouring it as if it were the sweet smell of baking bread.

“Smells like heaven, hey?”

He turned and grinned at Bill Kemp, his best friend and the troop’s comic. Bill stared past him at the city, face sombre like storm clouds.

“No, it smells like a whorehouse.”

“And you think heaven smells any worse?”

They stood there for a moment, eyes drinking in the sight. From where they were, they could see the ever-shifting decks of the Dregs, leading to the blood glass barrier of the Seawall. Above the Seawall, the only visible landmarks were the twin heights of Henry’s Mount and the Capitol. The whole city was just beginning to shine with her diadem of night lights, slowly flickering into existence as the sun set in the west.

“Come on, let’s get going,” Bill said after another moment.

They followed the rest of the troop away from the coast, along the dirt track that led to Gulltown. Emund walked slowly, his blue eyes darting from the sea to the city and back again. The wind ruffled his long brown hair, throwing it back in his face. He blinked, cursing that he had lost his cap on the road. A stray gust of wind had caught it up and off into the Wood. Not far, but far enough. Not even he was fool enough to venture off the Iron Road.

There were few people in the streets as they came into Gull Town. Out here, so close to the Wood, no alchemycal marvel could light their way. A few oil lamps hung from the eaves of the larger houses, carving most of the main street into shadows of black and grey. That was probably for the best: “The man who can look at a Gull Town street and not feel the slightest twinge of dread is no man at all,” quoth one Armacandi saying.

Gull Town had grown from a tiny village into Armacand’s chief link to the mainland. It had been built by those lucky few who survived the Change and were able to flee to the capital. By the time they reached there, however, they had been so touched by the fae magic that they were barely even human at all. Like those who lived in the Dregs that surrounded Armacand herself, the people of Gull Town had been refused passage to the city within and they had done the best they could outside. They had built houses of what stone they could find, trying to recapture the normality they craved.

Emund passed a house and paused for a moment. He couldn’t tell what it had once been. Twisted like a stalactyte, the rock skewed off into shapes that were anything but natural. It had an almost bewitching weirdness, with thin tapering towers that looked like skeletal arms beseeching the heavens for forgiveness. Whatever colour the stone had once been, now it was the colour of coursing blood, red and brilliant and terrible.

Magic. Magic pulsing through the very soil on which they had built their homes. Breathing in what stone they were able to quarry. The buildings themselves had come alive, twisting themselves into whatever shapes they wanted. Twisting those that lived there as well.

“Emund! Come on.”

Shaking himself from his reverie, Emund hurried to catch up. He cast one last look behind him at the bewitched house and swore he saw a figure vanish into the shadows on the rooftop. He turned away, a shiver running down his spine.

They turned off the main street, heading back towards the harbour. Here, so close to the sea, the buildings seemed almost normal, as if the magic was being kept at bay by the presence of the water. When Emund caught up, he saw the rest of the troupe stopped in front of a tavern on the harbour front. As he got closer, he saw a prancing green goat painted on the herald board outside. The goat had three eyes and four horns. Gull Town humour, he supposed.

Oaksgrave had clambered down off the wagon and was haggling with the owner for the price of a few rooms for the night. Artoria, his daughter, stood at his side, face stony as she stared at the scarf wrapped around the barkeep’s forehead. Emund turned away from them and leaned against the wagon.

“Ten bits Oaksgrave gets us the room for less than half a dozen crowns.”

“Not again, Emund. You got me last time, I’m not going to fall for it again.”

“Oh come on. What’s wrong with you? You’ve been in a sour mood since Navecastel”

Bill winced. “I don’t know what you’re talking about. I’m the same as always.”

“No you’re not. What happened? A whore refuse to do you?”

“Arsehole.”

“Whatever.”

The band had split in two now that they had stopped, same as it did every night. Emund glanced at the seasonal players, six men they had hired for the summer months. They stood in a huddle on the other side of the wagon, staring out across the channel, down the harbour or down at their feet. Anywhere but at the nine shareholders they had been travelling with for the past few months.

“What do you think they’ll do now?”

“Who cares,” Emund said with a snort. “Probably go back to hoeing turnips or to suckling noblemen’s cocks.”

“God, Emund. What’s the matter with you? They have families, lives... You can really be a turd sometimes.”

Emund laughed. “See! That’s exactly what I mean. A month ago, you’d have been joining in. You’ve changed.”

Bill looked up at him, studying his friend’s face as if he was looking for some sign. Finally, he shook his head. “No more than you have, my friend.”

“Oh come on, Bill. Lighten up. We’ll be home by tomorrow.”

“The sooner the better.”

Emund sighed dramatically, then turned to look at Oaksgrave and Artoria. The old illusionist was staring at him again, same as he had been for the past month. Maybe something had happened in Navecastel, something that had Oaksgrave on edge about Emund and Bill. Emund tried to think back, remembering the few weeks they had spent in the northern city. They had put on a play for the Earl of Navecastel, a couple of nights in the Black Goat Inn, then they had set off back home again. Nowhere in those memories was there anything that could explain Oaks’ and Bill’s strange behaviour.

Unless...

“You bastard!” Emund almost shrieked, turning on his friend. “Why didn’t you tell me?”

Bill looked up, taken aback by his friend’s shout. Some of the part-timers looked over at him, but quickly dropped their eyes again. “What?”

Emund dropped his voice, drawing closer to his friend. “You dupped her, didn’t you?”

“Who?”

“Artoria! Oaks’ daughter. You fucked Oaks’ daughter and didn’t tell me.”

Bill’s eyes widened and he began to shake. “What?! Of course not! Why’d you think that?”

“It makes perfect sense. You’ve been acting all weird, Oaks has been acting all weird, ever since Navecastel. The only explanation I can think of is that you fucked his daughter and he’s pissed. You could have told me.”

His friend, though, was looking past Emund, eyes fixed on Oaks and Artoria. “What do you mean Oaks’ has been acting weird? In what way?”

“Oh come on, you must have noticed it? Every time I turn my head he’s staring at us. I thought he was staring at me. I guess it was you instead. You old bastard. She could be your daughter.”

“Ki – I mean Emund. Shut up! I did not fuck Artoria. Or anyone else. But I want to know exactly what Oaksgrave has done. Everything.”

“God, you’re like an old woman. I can’t be bothered with you when you’re like this.”

As Emund turned away, his friend reached out to grab his arm. Emund shook it off. It was time to work out what the hell was going on. And he knew exactly how to go about it.

II

“Five crowns and that’s my final offer,” the barkeep snarled.

Artoria tried not to smile. She had known Oaksgrave for a long time, had seen him wheedle his way into more taverns than she could count, and yet it never ceased to amaze her. Suddenly, she couldn’t hold back the smile anymore and so she looked away to hide it.

Her eyes fell on Emund Blake, one of the younger actors. He was walking towards her and Oaksgrave, a cocky grin on his face. He had been a pain in her arse ever since... well ever since they left Armacand. And now he was heading towards her again.

James sighed and looked away. By then, coin had changed hands and the barkeep was yelling for one of his hands to come out and help with the luggage.

“What is it?” Oaksgrave asked her, eyes never leaving the group of men who came out to grab their chests.

“Blake,” Artoria told him, nodding behind her.

Oaksgrave’s head whipped round and when he saw the young actor coming his eyes widened in what Artoria would have sworn was fear. “Quickly. Get me inside.”

“But...”

“Now!”

The urgency in Oaks’ voice was enough to force her into action. She grabbed Oaks’ arm, then helped him down off the wagon and through the door before Blake could get any closer.

She paused inside the inn, blinking as her eyes accustomed themselves to the dim lighting.

Half-concealed in shadow, tables and chairs peppered the common room floor like weeds in a garden. The only light was provided by a pair of candle holders hanging from the ceiling, and the smell of sawdust, burning logs and spent ale clung to the dry walls. A roaring fire spat sparks from the hearth on the far wall, and Artoria saw that the barkeep had already taken up his place behind the bar. The whole thing would have been a cliché had it not been for the third eye hiding beneath the man’s headscarf.

“What was all that about?” she asked once they were inside.

“Not here,” Oaks hissed. “Get me upstairs and I’ll explain everything.”

Artoria forced herself to nod, though she was far from sure about the whole situation. Still, she carefully began to lead Oaksgrave across the table strewn common room. They headed through a door and up a flight of stairs, stopping at the top so that Oaksgrave could get his breath. As soon as he was recovered, she helped him down the corridor to the room that the barkeep had set aside for the old illusionist. It was under the eaves of the lower roof, with a tiny window that looked out over the sea. Artoria pulled back the curtains while Oaksgrave sat on the bed, holding his side slightly.

“Are you alright?”

“I’m fine. I’m sorry about that.”

“What happened? What was all that about?”

Oaks paused, his face creased with a frown. “I... I’m not sure. Master Blake... He’s been making me feel uneasy ever since we left Navecastel. I can’t quite put my finger on it but there is definitely something wrong there. Something... I don’t know. Maybe I’m just getting old. My time.”

“Don’t say that. You’ll outlive us all.”

Oaksgrave laughed, but half-way through it turned into a wracking cough. Artoria took a step towards him, but the old man waved him off. A few deep breaths later and he had his coughing under control.

“I doubt that somehow,” he said finally. “I’m an old man, little one. Too old to be galavanting around the kingdom. Those days are behind me. And besides, the price for outliving you all is too high. The Doctor has proved that.”

A sudden silence descended on the room. Artoria turned and stared out the window, her eyes catching the bright lights of the distant city and reflecting them back a hundred fold. She could sense Oaksgrave looking at her.

“Have you heard anything?”

“Since we left?” She turned to see Oaksgrave shake his head. “No, nothing. It seems my old friend has given up on me. Whether that is a good thing or not...”

“What do you mean?”

“I mean that if the good Doctor has given up tracking down his old friends, then maybe it’s because he has something more important on his mind. And whatever Marwood thinks is important... Well, let’s just say it can’t be a good thing for the rest of us.”

“And what about Tess?”

Oaksgrave shifted on the bed, looking uneasily at the floor. “You know what she is now. She hasn’t spoken in... too long. I’ve heard rumours, sightings of her shade walking the Dregs. But nothing concrete. Sometimes I think it would be best to end it for her. Put her out of her misery.”

Artoria looked at the old man, wondering if that was really how he felt. Tess and he had found her out in the Woods and taken her in when most would have slit her throat and let her blood water the cursed soil of the forest. Tess had taught her everything she needed to know in order to hide from her father, had taught her how to control her magic. But even now she did not understand what their relationship had been. Mother and daughter? Friends? More? Less? It was as ever shifting and precarious as the bond between Tess and Oaksgrave.

“Still, the danger has increased. You told me yourself, the Doctor has never been so close to discovering you’re all still alive.” I can’t go on hiding without you.

“I have spent my entire life hiding from that man,” Oaksgrave said. “Or at least that is how it feels sometimes. I realise this is all new to you, Artoria. Sometimes I wonder whether it was a good idea, sharing all of that ancient history with you. Some things are better left alone.”

Artoria realised from the tone that she wasn’t going to get any more information out of Oaksgrave. She had known the old man long enough to realise that once he had decided something, he would not and could not be talked around.

“I’d better go and find my room,” she said.

Oaksgrave nodded. “I would like to rest. But come back after dinner. We’ll... Well, you know.”

She nodded, her stomach churning at the thought. As soon as the door closed behind her, she let her shoulders drop. This was becoming too difficult. Oaksgrave... The things he was involved in were far beyond what she could handle. The plans he had made, the man he was struggling against... Artoria just hoped that he had stronger allies than just her. If Oaksgrave were to fall... He was her only hope now with Tess lost in some mental prison of her own making. The mark would not lift itself and only Oaksgrave and Tess had any idea how to go about removing it. Sighing, she moved off down the corridor, wondering what awaited them in Armacand.

III

The common room was empty that night, leaving the two tables closest to the fire free for the Earl’s Men to grab for themselves. The barkeep, true to his code, remained behind the bar, keeping a wary eye on the fifteen men while he wiped down glasses and bottles with a dish rag so dirty it left more grime than it removed.

As it had been throughout the tour of the kingdom, the shareholders and the part-timers sat separate. There was something different in the air, though, a tension that had only sharpened since they had reached Gull Town.

It was the swords, Emund thought. Every man in the troupe had one, strapped to his side or leaning against his chair. Looking for reassurance, Emund allowed his hand to drop down to his knife, the familiar cold steel reassuring against his fingers. He and Bill were surrounded by the other shareholders of the troup. Jonah Kilann and Thea Reese hadn’t joined them; in fact the two had barely left their room since they arrived. Emund had heard the two of them humping away from three doors away, Thea’s extravangant moans sending chills down his spine. That left Charles Dallin with his olive cape, M’Iran il Chek soaking up the heat from the fire, and the two dwarves Farren and Hallen Jape. The entire troupe of the Earl of Pemberley’s Men, minus Artoria and Oaksgrave who had vanished after dinner.

Farren, as usual, was telling a joke. “And then,” he said, almost choking on his own laughter, “the priest says...”

Under his breath, but still loud enough for Emund to hear, Richard Wattle muttered, “Blasphemer.”

Farren broke off. Emund turned his head slightly, catching the eye of another of the part-timers. “Did you hear something?”

The man shook his head. “Nothing, boss. I yawned.”

Staring at him for a moment, Emund shrugged and turned back to Farren. “What was I saying?” the dwarf asked.

“You were telling us the same bloody priest-and-a-dog joke you’ve been telling us every night of this God-forsaken tour,’ Bill said.

“Well fine,” Farren said. “You tell us a joke, dickweed.”

“Yeah, you’re supposed to be the comedian, Kemp,” Farren’s twin chimed in. “I just wish you’d update your repartee a little.”

“Fuck you, shorthalf.”

With a big grin, Farren said, “I’d rather let your sister do that, Billy boy.”

Kemp’s eyes widened. “You fucking little...”

Launching himself at Farren with a roar, Kemp toppled both men and chairs onto the floor. The dwarf hit the ground hard, all the air knocked out of his lungs. Emund joined the other shareholders backing away, the only sounds the scrape of their chairs on the flagstones and their cheers as they egged the two men on. Farren threw his elbow at Kep’s cheek, but he missed, leaving himself open to a fist to his temple. The pain flared, infuriating, giving the dwarf renewed strength. He rolled over, pulling Bill with him so that he was on top and it was Bill who was protecting himself.

The dwarf struck out at Bill again and again, trying to get past his defences. He seemed so intent on getting in blows that he didn’t even feel Bill’s legs go around his waist. Suddenly, Bill jackknifed his whole body and Fallen found himself on his back, his arms pinned to his chest by Bill’s strong arms.

“Now, you northern bastard, what exactly did you say about my sister?”

Farren struggled briefly, but he knew when he was beat. They all knew there was no way he was getting out. “Oh get off Kemp. You know how much I love your sister. I’d never touch a hair on her head. Or anywhere else.”

“Yeah. Only cause you know I’d kill you if you did.”

“You’d have to get to me pretty quick. Leanna would probably have me dead and buried before you’d even figured out what happened. Come on, let me up.”

Bill stayed where he was for a moment, eyes rolling as he pretended to think about it. Emund felt a wave of happiness wash over him; it was good to see his friend becoming himself again. Finally, Bill sprang upwards, landing on both his feet and leaning down to help Farren up. The two men shared a grin as they began to lift the chairs they had knocked over. Emund caught Hallen muttering curses as he dropped three copper bits in Charles Dallin’s hand. He turned away to hide a smile.

As he settled back in his chair, Emund caught sight of the barkeep hesitating behind the bar. He held a piece of paper in his hand, which he was studying. He looked up at the Men, back at the paper, then back at the Men. He saw that Emund was looking at him and he started. Emund smiled. The barkeep seemed about to turn away, vanish back behind the bar, then he sighed and started to walk over.

His reluctant dance made Emund smile. He looked across at Bill and nodded to the barkeep. Bill saw the man walking over and he grinned, winking at his friend. Emund winked back; just like old times. It was all the encouragement Bill needed.

Leaning over, he grabbed a jug of beer and a spoon from the table. Clambering onto his chair, he tapped the jug once, twice with the spoon, making sure that he had everyone’s attention.

“Gentlemen of the venerable Earl of Pemberly. Fellow players. Honourable barkeep. Please lend me your eyes, ears and pockets. The reckoning is due.”

The players all exchanged a confused look before noticing the barkeep walking towards them. They all groaned in one mass wave.

“Come on, come on. We’ve been well served for our last night in the wild. Tomorrow, we return home!”

A ragged cheer rose up, followed by uncertain shuffling from the seasonal players.

“Before we pay the piper, I personally would like to raise a toast.” Lifting his mug of ale towards the ceiling, he smiled in his best imitation of a gracious host. “To our fellow players, who so ably assisted us throughout our tour.”

Hesitant smiles beamed up at Bill. It was almost endearing; they looked so starved for recognition that they reminded Emund of a pack of downbeaten dogs scratching for scraps.

“In recognition of their hard work. I would like to offer them a gift.” Bill allowed his gaze to wander from one to the other, studying their upturned faces. Emund followed his gaze. He had lived with them all for the past two months, but he realised that he barely knew the names of a handful of them. Oh well, it wasn’t like they had actually done anything during the tour. A few bit parts here and there, a lot of lifting and carrying...

Finally, Bill’s gaze settled on Wattle. Emund sketched out his thin and scrawny face, that cleft lip that made him look like he was constantly sneering. He felt a queasy feeling in his stomach. Disgust, he realised.

“Richard Wattle. Come here.”

Wattle rose, surprise etched on his face. The rest of the shareholders seemed to have realised that there was something behind Bill’s sudden generosity – they looked on like hungry timber wolves.

“Now then, don’t be shy,” Bill said as Wattle hesitated. “We’re all actors here.”

Wattle took a step closer, eyes cloaked and wary. “What?”

“Careful of your tone, Wattle. Remember whose giving the gift.”

The parttimer scowled, but he spoke less harshly. “Fine. I’m here.”

Very slowly, drawing the moment out, Bill motioned the barkeep over. Sensing the tension, the man held back for a moment, sliding forward reluctantly. As soon as Bill plucked the reckoning from his hand, he scurried away, back to the safety of his glasses and cloth.

Bill straightened up, sharing another glance with Emund. “In return – and in thanks – for all your hard work, I am willing to give all of you fine actors the honour... of settling our bill.”

Grinning at the other Men like the cat who got the cream, he threw the paper at Wattle’s feet.

All of the seasonal players watched the paper flutter down, ever so slowly, landing finally at Wattle’s feet. Wattle just stood there, looking down at the piece of paper. Emund had expected all of the shareholders to be laughing at his joke, but even they were staring at Wattle. Even he could only manage a queasy smile. Only Bill was grinning.

Then Wattle snapped.

With a bellow of fury, the parttimer surged forward towards Bill. He had slammed him off and over the chair before anyone even had time to realise what was happening. Bill’s head struck the flagstones for the second time, this time so hard that Emund wondered how he did not black out. Wattle, though, was pummeling at him, months of envy, shame and pent up rage erupting in a storm of fists, foreheads and teeth.

He’s going to die, Emund thought. Oh God, he’s going to die. The realisation hit him like wave striking the shore, washing away all the rest. He surged forwards, vaguely aware that the other shareholders had also come to their feet. They found their way was blocked by the other parttimers.

“Leave them,” one of them, the oldest of the group, growled.

“What?” Hallen snarled. “Fuck you, you poney seasoner.”

“What did you call me, runt?”

“You heard him.” Emund now. “We’ve had enough of your bloody lip. We’re the players. You lot, you’re fodder.”

With a soundless roar, the partimers surged forward, eager for blood. Emund had time to realise that the common room was erupting into a free for all, when a jab to his ribs robbed him of breath. He tried desperately to get some air, but it was as though his lung had collapsed. He clawed at his throat, kicking madly in his attempts to breathe. Panic seized him, lending him extra strength, and he forced the parttimer off him. He backed away, his breathing only slowly returning to normal.

Able to take a moment, Emund noted with horror that the free for all had degenerated into a sword fight. Swords, cudgels, knives and a few particularly cruel looking blades, twisted and barbed, flashed in the hands of shareholder and parttimer alike. Already a body lay on the floor, oozing blood.

For a single, clear moment, Emund realised that it was all his fault. Whoever the body was, he was dead because of Emund and Bill. The powder had been lying fallow for months, yes, but they were the ones who had set the match.

He caught sight of movement out of the corner of his eye. He was surprised to see Bill moving towards him, bloodied but otherwise alright. The cocky grin had vanished from his face, replaced by a grim determination. He grabbed Emund by the arm and began to drag him towards the door.

“What you doing?” Emund said, craning his neck back to the brawl.

“This diversion is only going to last a few minutes. The Watch’ll be here by then.”

“Diversion?” Emund forced his friend to a halt, pulling him round to look at him. “Bill what the hell are you talking about?”

Gone was the grinning fool Emund had grown up with. Now the Bill who looked back at him was all business, a flinty cast to his eyes making him look much older than he actually was. He shook his head. “By the Goddess Ki- Emund. Did you really think I cared one notch about those fools back there? I wasn’t looking to pick a fight or make a point. I just needed to get us some time alone with Oaksgrave.”

“You’re still on that? What’s gotten into you, Bill? Why this sudden obsession with Oaks?”

Bill shook his head again. “Goddess, you really have gone haven’t you?” He seemed to be talking to himself.

“Bill, listen, let’s just...”

“No!” Bill’s eyes flared, the flint sparking tinder into a blaze. “You do whatever the hell you want, Emund. I’m going to talk to Oaksgrave and get some answers. You... Well, you do what you have to.”

With that, his friend turned and began to march down the corridor towards the stairs. Emund hesitated for a moment, the sounds of battle calling him back to the common room. Then, growling under his breath, he set off towards the stairs. There was no way he was leaving Bill alone in the state he was in.

Bill and Emund ran up the stairs as quickly and quietly as possible. Behind them, the sounds of the fight began to grow softer, until eventually they dropped out of hearing altogether. When they reached the top, Bill shot off down the corridor, barely leaving Emund time to catch his breath. Whatever he wanted to find out from Oaksgrave, it seemed important to him.

To them, Emund thought. It was important for them. He didn’t know how he knew, but the certainty was beyond question.

No torches had been lit to guide their way, leaving the corridor dark as a fluxed man’s blood. There was the mearest hint of light beneath the doors of some of the rooms, but nothing more. Emund guided himself by touch alone, keeping his hand on the wall as he hurried to keep up with Bill.

He froze as he saw Bill suddenly highlighted by a harsh light that poured out into the corridor. Then Bill was through the door, into the room where Oaksgrave was staying. Emund scurried forwards, not wanting to lose sight of his friend for a moment longer than necessary. When he arrived in the doorway, though, he froze again.

The scene was unmistakeable. Oaksgrave lay prone on the floor, his body bloody and battered. A pool of blood was already soaking into the carpet, staining the yellow weave the colour of a dying sunset. By his left hand lay a knife.

Bill had stopped just inside the room, his mouth open as he stared at the dead man. Emund took a step back, his back striking the door post and he let his head fall back, trying to control his breathing.

He was dead. The old man was dead. And if they didn’t find some way of explaining what the hell they were doing there before someone else found them, they’d probably both hang before morning.

He turned to tell Bill that they had to hurry and hide the body, at least until they could find some kind of solution. He didn’t hear whoever came up behind him. The cudgel struck the back of his head and the darkness closed in.

Progress Report: 2

2008-03-11T08:31:00.000-07:00

Long time no blog...

The whole idea of this blog was to trace the progress of my nanowrimo novel from last year, Treachery, Treason and Deceit. I thought now would be a good time to come back to it as I have just completed my first reread of the novel.

First impressions... Pretty good actually! :) I'm glad the story and the characters still excite me. There's some major problems with it, some big work to do, but then there are also some parts which I reread and wondered if it was me who had written them, they were actually quite good! :)

I quite like the structure of it, though I may have to rework it slightly. I'm all excited about it and am going to try and get some work in on it this week as I have the rest of the week off work.

Anyway, I'll try and keep posted.

Joel

Progress... Or Lack Thereof

2008-01-19T05:34:00.000-08:00

So, my work on the Kingdom Postbox has sputtered, flared, sputtered... and collapsed.

January has been almost a total loss, for the exact same reason it generally is... I just can't decide which way to go. My plot, world and ideas seem fantastic one day and the next just don't seem good enough. I've gone through at least three different permutations of my novel ideas, just trying to find the one that fits. And I procrastinate, putting it off until next week, next month...

I wish I knew if all authors go through this. I thought that since this was a second draft it would be easier. Instead, I find myself even more stuck than normal.

I know that all I have to do is get on with it, just choose a direction and barrel on...

So there you have it. Stuck in the dolldrums...

A/U vs. All New - Update

2007-12-09T12:46:00.001-08:00

Well, what do you know! I decide to leave my nano novel aside, sick of fighting myself about the A/U vs new world debate. Then I go out tonight and make a decision! So I think I'm going to go with a new world.

Basically, every year we have a Festival of Lights here in Lyons. Me and my wife went out to watch the lights and I realised what it was about an all new world that attracted me to the idea in the first place and what put me off using an A/U. I don't think Elizabethan England is impressive enough for what I want to write.

For example, one of the things I love in Scott Lynch's Gentleman Bastards Sequence are the cities. And in those cities, the buildings are large, impressive and monumentous. You don't get that in Elizabethan London. You don't really find it in modern London, though slightly more. What I can get from a whole new world is a city that has that monumentous feel to it. And with the idea of a city in three parts (a floating city above, a pyramidal city between and a downtrodden city below) I can have both. The monumentous buildings above and between, the feel of Elizabethan London below.

So there you have it. Of course, I'll probably have changed my mind by tomorrow... :) But hey, that's part of the fun.

The Kingdom Postbox

2007-12-09T01:21:00.000-08:00

So, having put aside the Magician's Men for a while, I'm now starting work on The Kingdom Postbox. This was my '05 Nano, and the first Nanonovel I managed to write The End on.

What's it about? It's the story of a little girl who must venture into a world of Dreams and Nightmares to save an uncle she has never met. It's about letters, and dreams, and stories, and emotions. It's about a world below our own, where Dreams and Nightmares live, protected from Reality.

Oh yeah, and it has huge walking cities, giant floating islands that move around at will across a crystaline sea, giant feline-dragons, Nonsense-spouting sea dragons, a strange house where no room is ever in the same place, a mad queen whose island is slowly dying around her and who turns little girls into dolls so that she can live in their bodies, and so much more... :)

So, that's the story. I'll keep this blog posted on how I get along!

Giving it time to breathe...

2007-12-08T05:11:00.000-08:00

Well, I've finally made the decision. I think I've thrown myself into the rewriting/worldbuilding of the Magician's Men way too quickly. I'm not able to look at it all objectively, and am just going round in circles. So I've decided to follow my original plan, namely to try and work on my nano project from two years ago, a YA novel originally called the Kingdom Postbox.

First step is to sit down and read through it all, which I'm going to try and do this weekend. I just want to be able to do a single read through, working out whether the world, etc... still interests me. Then I'll make a decision.

So, we'll see... If I decide not to go down that road, I have more than enough other projects, ideas, to fall back on!! :)

A/U vs. All New

2007-12-03T10:31:00.000-08:00

And the big, great worldbuilding extravangza began... and prompty collapsed!

I'm blocked. You see, before nano I was having difficulty with my worldbuilding. I've been hesitating between one or two worlds: setting it in an A/U Elizabethan world and setting it in a made-up world. Both have their own pros and cons.

A/U Elizabethan world:
Pros --> The whole thing began thinking about what would have happened if Christopher Marlowe apart from being a spy was also a magician.
--> Using an A/U gives the story a background that's already there.
--> London hanging in the skies!
--> John Dee as Queen's Magician vs. Francis Walsingham as a Ghost
--> Elizabethan London was very, very cool place
--> The joy of playing around with expectations

Cons --> The straitjacket of reality!
--> The decision of how much to change
--> The fact that not enough real historical characters appear
--> Though I shouldn't be thinking about it, the little voice in the back of my head that says an A/U world won't sell to publishers as well.

All New World:
Pros --> Blank canvas
--> The possibility of creating some really amazing places like GRRM does in A Song of Ice and Fire
--> Just the pure joy of creating a world from scratch which is one of my favourite things about writing fantasy anyway.
--> Strange races, amazing places and some pretty cool organisations I've made up

Cons --> It's not an A/U!
--> What if the amazing places, stranges races and pretty cool organisation aren't that amazing, strange or cool?
--> The lack of resonance with taking away the historical setting.

So... i'm stuck. I have no idea what to do. I've asked my writing friend(s) and posted a new topic on nanowrimo.org to see if I can get some help! Apart from that, I'm relatively lost.

Help! Someone!!!

Joel

The End... And The Beginning

2007-12-01T11:34:00.000-08:00

Well, nanowrimo is over for another year! :) And this year I have a finished first draft: rough, a srange mixture between a film script, a comicbook script and a novel, but there anyway.

Now all I have to do is to work it into a proper novel.

This blog, I hope, will be the trace of that. I will also include any comments on what is going on in the world of sci-fi, fantasy, thrillers, etc... and reviews of the different books I read.

We'll have to see how it goes.

Anyone interested in knowing a little bit more about me, I'll send you to my original blog http://joel-brown.blogspot.com/ which hasn't been update in ages but still... :)

So, here we go. Kick off of the big worldbuilding/edit project: Monday 3rd December.